Co sądzicie... :)

Witam! ;]
Poniżej zaprezentuje Wam mój 1 tekst piosenki... nie jest to hmmm profesjonalny teskt :PP, ale proszę o opinie xD
W stylu rap / hip hop ;)
Z góry thx za obiektywne oceny!!! :

EMOTIONS

God, I' m here... any emotions? ... listen,

I see... everything paind me, kill my dreams... always bring down?! Yeah... I see - so U know a white life? - GREAT! hahaha...
but - oh no, no "but"! - every night in this base part, fukin part!!!

God, I' m here...

Life is run, constant obstacles - like steeplechase, but... yeah! I say it, whatever - you can fight with it! Yea... dream it? So lovely day - you can stand in his way! Yes, this muthafukin man, who fuckin your girl!!! - Feel it?! It' s yours emotions...
Yeah, great! Say it now! - Whatever you say I am!!! - Feel it?! So lovely day...

God, I' m here...

Now.. tell yourself - you are useless white man -you outtie and u live in your white square?! Yea... that' s true.. but It' s yours emotions... let them to fly away.. so lovely day...

God, take me to the hell, yea- this fukin (useless) place, where I were then...
Remember me?! Good, i ain' t goin nowhere.. I flew away my emotinos.. now I start my white dream, pozdro!

Nie znam angielskiego :/

@melkaMix:
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